Yoooo! Ok so Overall it's not bad but there were many mistakes.
Firstly the rhythm should have been handled differently it is too slow at time like 1:25 - 1:28 and the prince of tennis track overall should be faster paced.
Also avoid frame blend like the kise clip at 0:43
And the whole clip lacks impact and color. Don't be afraid to experiment with pan/crop and FX color will add a lot of atmosphere.
I really did like the beginning. It was a good build up but i was a little dissapointed when the song picked up.
So what you guys should improve on are:
1. Overall pace/rhythm
Looking forward to your next project